Interesting...very interesting. I'll try my hand at interpretation. Let me know how off or on I am.

General interpretation: A criticism of the materialness of the world.

Line-by-line:
Despite the sun,
Deceive the shadow,
//Respect neither law nor corruption.
Never shall they remorse.
//For they shall not repent.
Every open mouth,
That leaks the norm,
//The beliefs of society
Welts the aching back,
Of the forever sane.
//clash with the beliefs of the "forever sane"

Beyond each current,
We drift away from stone,
Covered in ivy of the world,
//The grandeur of the world, its buildings, covered in materialism. The "sane" depart from it.
Marked territory of the fraud.
//it is all a lie
And now they eternally sleep,
Beneath the blinding layer.
//They cannot escape the illusion of material wealth
Yet we, the lucid, step back...
//But the "sane" the "lucid" are not caught in this trap

I will critique supposing that my interpretation is somewhat correct (if it isn't, I can do another one based on the new info).

"Despite the sun"<< I do not think 'despite' can be used as a verb (which is how I think it is being used); rather spite, though I understand the sake of alliteration.

Why is it "forever" sane? And "eternally" blinded? Surely, people can change, and ideas do not live forever.

we drift away from "stone"<<I am not sure what stone means; I wrote in the interp, that I thought it meant buildings, but that is a stretch at the best. Probably a much better interpretation that I didn't think of exists.

"ivy of the world"<<this is good way to put it, and works well with the "stone."

last four lines of stanza 1<<I think comma use is a bit excessive and disrupts the flow.

What I liked best: good metaphors, , good imagery.
What I liked less: You think the sane are right and society is wrong. Perhaps, society is right and the sane are wrong? Or somewhere in the gray? The claim to divine justice is rarely justified. Or perhaps, my interpretation is messed up.

Shameless plug: if you're ever free, I'd be happy if you could critique some of my poetry. Thanks.

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I extremely appreciate this comment, thank you for your time.
Your critic was off some what, but a few things you said hit the target.
I won't completely tell you what it all means, personal stuff.

Actually, this is about my family life and how I see it.
'The Lucid' are the only people in my family I can trust, and love with my entire heart. I'm not going to go into details on why I don't trust my own blood since it's personal, but I can see how you would think about society and the such when reading my poem.

I've used the word 'stone' in many of my writings due to the fact that it's a metaphor of mine, that's personal yet again. That's why allot of people don't understand it.

Thank you very much for the feedback. Like I said, I extremely appreciate it.
And I'd love to critic your poetry/ and watch you for that matter.
Thanks again.

-Amanda

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Amanda...that picture is amazing. Fantastic work here, I love this!

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Thank you Jeff, much appreciated!

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This is utterly amazing. Lol...I keep trying to describe what I like about it, but...the whole thing is so flawless and beautiful...<3

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thank you, that means allot

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Thanks for the reply.

I can understand that it's personal.

Perhaps I will come to understand this piece more through reading your other works

I look forward to your critiques XD

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